its very imaginative and very gory... i like it. good work.. but work on your multi rhyming scheme a lil
its very imaginative and very gory... i like it. good work.. but work on your multi rhyming scheme a lil
im liking this drop man the wording is good and the flow is sick, the topic is good aswel man.
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The bitch type I dislike, I'm rougher than a fist fight,
All chicks ain't shit, ain't no such thing as Miss Right,
So we can never be a couple hun
Fuck love, all I got for ho's is hard dick and bubble gum. - Big L
you dont think you've got enough....
^LOL!! I was joking around, but more is always welcomed....
and how that collab doing, how long do you think ill take you to finish it?
Sylablle count was perfect to me, and felt like a very versatile piece that would flow over a multitude of beats. Multi's were definately fine and the rhyme scheme was changed up enough to stop the piece dragging at all.
Not really a whole lot in the way of depth but, definately, the story and technical aspects were strong enough to carry this piece by themselves.
Normally i dont go for the whole "...and then he woke up" types of ending, but i really got on board with this as the fact that the protagonists goals for life are so violent, leads us to feel a sense of pity. I also took from this that the bad things at the start (poor financial state etc.) were infact true, which only enchances our empathy for him.
Great story and technically flawless - i'd like to see something a little deeper next time though, maybe experiement with metaphor, symbolism and other techniques.
Forget lables, I shook the hands of time when I struck a deal
Reain
Shit dope as hell, flat out!
I thought that you did a very nice job with this bar. The imagery and everything was on point! nice job
really ain't much to say...everyones said it...lol
dope...
period.
..iCONSTRUCT..
..Ecliptik aka. Orijin..
I wasn't sure if this would make HOF to be honest,
I'm not saying it's not a worthy piece, because it obviously is, but a lot of regular people who post in OM seem to a drop half decent piece and they make it into HOF and sometimes the newer people writing in here, get overshadowed.
Good job man
It already made HoF dude, lol....
lol I know brother, that's why I'm saying congrats.
Oh shit, lol, I didn't read what you said right.. I thought you were saying you didn't know if it WILL make it, lol, but nah, my bad.. n thanx bruh....
It's ok bro, I just had another read of it since it was upped, mulit's were dope.
Keep dropping brother.
this was dope bro it flowed rediculously the delivery was on point this was really solid man.The twist at the end is really good too props