6 Hours.

[God's Deciple]

6 Hours.

My eyes open wide,trying to figure out where the hell i am
Feeling of discomfort on each side,just feel like im damned
Last from what i remembered,i was walking towards the house
Of where i lived,but there,i lost sight by being roused
Looking forward to see my spouse,nothing comes back to me
I slowly try to concentrate,look up at the clock and it became 1:33
I search around the room,and find a key stuck in my left pocket
Find a note under a broom,next to this pipepish socket
Feel my head drifting up like a rocket,than i read the paper
Reading it,it says "You must find a box attached to a gator"
Confused by what it said,must be a riddle of some sort
Another note i find says im soon to be dead,and my time is short
I scream out loud "This isnt funny!",and something comes back to me
At a club i realized i was being with other women than suddenly...
Gate-or?I find out the riddle,so i got to the door but is locked
I use the key and it doesnt work,i felt as if my hopes stopped
I go towards the toilet,and in the water i see a small toy
The toy was a gator,in the mouth of it i feel all around
A box which contained another key,than i dropped down
I look more around,loudly i let out another large scream
Seemed like nothing was right,so i try to redeem
Four doors,one on each side,straight,back,left and right
Yet again another note i find,tells me choose the right
I go towards than to that side,stick the key in
Happy this sort of game that i played,i felt i just win
I look in the key hole,than i twist the key slowly
Than i hear a boom,and feel a burning sensation roughly...
Bloody gooze down my shirt,i thought i have had this
I start crying thought there was bliss,end up pissed
Crying,looking up towards the ceiling,i see a string
I pull on it,another notes comes down,is what brings
What lingers in this note sent chills up right my spine
I felt as if i wanted to die,and the note i didnt want to find
My time was about to be up,reading it i find im poisened
Scared i look up at the clock,and the minutes left is 10
I start hurrying and screaming trying to find the correct door
Stick the key in the left side,and i drop on the floor
Go towards the front,put it in,and again doesnt work
Run all the way to the back,only to find what lurks...
My last hope to getting out,i put in it and find what lingers
A man behind the door holding a complex,than hear a trigger....

[God's Deciple]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...05&page=1&pp=15
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...68&page=1&pp=15

[God's Deciple]

Rise

[Johnny 6-feet]

Neither of those links work, replace them with ones that do or this will be closed thanks.

[status_unknown]

See, i like reading writtens like this. not too long, and definitly not too short. anyways, ima get right to the point. the main thing i actually like in this script was the imagery. It wasn't the best, but the best i have read so far. as far as grammer, that was decent aswell. only thing i didn't enjoy was the way the plot was created. basically, it had a good twist to it, it just wasn't creative enough. holp this is any help if needed. good read. Peace.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=246837

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[God's Deciple]

Will to git to it.And johnny i will dont worry.