NBL Practice Text Battle
This is a test battle for an upcoming user run battle league using the Front Lines as the battle arena.
12 lines, due whenever
First to 4 votes wins, 3-0 equals KO
@NoNun2
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NBL Practice Text Battle
This is a test battle for an upcoming user run battle league using the Front Lines as the battle arena.
12 lines, due whenever
First to 4 votes wins, 3-0 equals KO
@NoNun2
AI generated battle verse:
Yo, Nonun2, I’m spittin’ fire, no disguise,
Mic in my grip, watch the stage catch a blaze in my eyes.
I’m a queen with the flow, cuttin’ foes like a knife,
Bars so sharp, they carve your ego out ya life.
You step to me? Ha, better check your position,
I’m droppin’ wisdom, flippin’ rhymes with precision.
City’s mine, I’m the spark in the dark, no bluff,
Got the crowd hyped, screamin’ “Nonun, that’s enough!”
Your weak lines crumble, they ain’t built to last,
I’m a hurricane, you’re just dust in my path.
Bow down, kid, to the empress of this game,
Nonun2, leavin’ legends in my name.
@NoNun2 practice diss this opponent.
I'm already voting the AI, crazy "wack" as it was.
Lmao don’t do NoNun like that give the homie a chance to put it down.
No, I do not think I will on the count of I simply cannot.
THANK YOU!!! Check - I SUCK at disses though - give me an hour
Jack Jack can’t find Jill
Can’t get it up without a pill
Jack Jack you know me still
But you will never know what you really feel
I feel ya, I feel your pain
But you will never ever get my reign
You’re just a stain that can’t sustain
You never took $15 and made it a key
You ain’t ever shook in battles until here came me
Jack you ain’t wack you just a little phony
Fronting in all your rhymes
You ain’t a horsemen you just a pony
Nickel you don’t know me…
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I think Jack won
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Told you I sick at disses lol
Lol ok ok. damn i got smoked but i was just the messenger :laugh:
NoNun i’m not your opponent lol i’m just the one who posted the verse. it was written by the computer & is simulating a female rapper i believe.
write a battle verse for a female rapper named “Queen Fresh” haha
Ok… LMAO
Queen Fresh
Queen fresh… fresh? why you fronting
You’re cunt smell so bad nickels think they are hunting
Queen? I suppose you the queen bee
Sucking honey out a dick that rather have me
I was debating what I would say
Cause I know that you’re hating and on your way
Queen… you know most royalty come from incest
And yet you think that loyalty come from the best
Time to take a test
A pen and a pad and give it an hour
While your man on his way cause he say you’re pussy too sour
Just want you to know it’s mine he about to devour
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Cause you just a weed but I am the flower
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Idk I stuck at this shit
hahaha nah you don’t suck. you’re not a battle rapper so you can’t be expected to drop “Hit ‘Em Up” pt 2 lol…
you actually have a pretty good outlook on areas of attack when it comes to disses.
Jack Jack can’t find Jill
Can’t get it up without a pill
LOL - ouch.
Jack Jack you know me still
But you will never know what you really feel
- filler
I feel ya, I feel your pain
But you will never ever get my reign
You’re just a stain that can’t sustain
- decent imagery but filler
You never took $15 and made it a key
You ain’t ever shook in battles until here came me
not bad. decent “bragging swag” type line.
Jack you ain’t wack you just a little phony
Fronting in all your rhymes
You ain’t a horsemen you just a pony
good way to end the verse. decent metaphor
Nickel you don’t know me…
nice ominous outro line
Lol even though i wasn’t your opponent, i like your approach to the diss you aimed at me. you took shots at my ability to perform sexually, said i was scared to battle you, questioned my street credibility and said that i be lying in rhymes. those are great angles of attack. in that aspect, you did very well.
you had some lines that weren’t exactly disses, we call that “filler”.. that’s what can be worked on, making every bar as hard hitting as possible. also, voters like to see metaphors & wordplay. your “you ain’t a horseman you just a pony” is decent wordplay. i believe you can take that higher. doesn’t have to happen immediately, just something to work on for later.
now for the Queen Fresh verse:
Queen fresh… fresh? why you fronting
You’re cunt smell so bad nickels think they are hunting
Lmao this line is funny even though it doesn’t make much sense in context. what is the correlation between her smelling bad and niggas hunting? you get my meaning? it’s a great angle of attack but it has to make sense too. could have been better but i still like it.
Queen? I suppose you the queen bee
Sucking honey out a dick that rather have me
Oof. i really liked this line. great imagery. nice metaphor. simple and direct.
I was debating what I would say
Cause I know that you’re hating and on your way
- filler
Queen… you know most royalty come from incest
And yet you think that loyalty come from the best
another very good angle of attack. i feel like the set up and the punchline could have been switched and it would have worked just as well or better.
Time to take a test
A pen and a pad and give it an hour
While your man on his way cause he say you’re pussy too sour
i like this set up/punch combo. same energy as the honey sucking dick line. direct and to the point.
Just want you to know it’s mine he about to devour
Cause you just a weed but I am the flower
decent closer. i can respect the “talk to them” approach, i do that too. i like the explicit imagery too, very disrespectful to an opponent.
aight so, overall, i’m glad i got to see two different verses from you. helped gauge where you are lyrically & what you need to work on.
first of all, you certainly don’t suck. you’re a dope writer in general, just not a battle rapper, so you’re able to find concepts and angles to write about very easily, it’s just some of the execution that needs polishing.
you definitely need to work on replacing the filler parts with more disses, and work on using stronger metaphors but you aren’t nearly as bad at this as you think haha.
Ok @NoNun2 .. here’s your next opponent, Ransom Writer. using the advice from my last post, take this guy out.
From, Ransom Writer, AI generated battle rap opponent:
Yo, Nonun2, step up, you ain't spittin' no flame,
Ransom Writer’s here to bury your name.
Your rhymes so weak, they belong in a nursery,
Soft like cotton, your flow’s got no urgency.
You claim you’re hot, but your bars are ice-cold,
My lines hit harder than a story untold.
You’re frontin’ like a queen, but your crown’s made of plastic,
My verses so sharp, they’re leavin’ you drastic.
Nonun2, more like No One Cares,
Your mic’s a mirage, you’re spittin’ thin air.
I’m the lyrical sniper, you’re caught in my scope,
Ransom’s the name, leavin’ Nonun2 no hope!
You know what I’m a really try hard on this one - I’ll drop by tonight though and THANK YOU!!!!
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And hit em up 2… next time I see pac I’ll ask if he help me lol
Ransom… I’ll give you a chance son
Cause really, lyrically this is kinda fun
You couldn’t bury me if you was a dog with a bone
You just jerking words jerking off to girl 12 on the phone
Hot or Ice - I slaughter you in both
Now stand to the wall so I can measure my sons growth
I rather be plastic than mushy
But really I rather you wipe the shit that you talk from your mouth and your tushy
You can’t see me you can’t be me but your rhyme wasn’t half bad
But really you just mad cause you were abused by your dad
It’s kinda sad actually…
Ransom with the chance huh
I pay 24 and 4 more if you kill yourself before I call war
Have you begging no more cause your mom sucking dick cause she a whore
I’m ok… I don’t need to murder you no more
But really what’s all the hating for?
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But really ransom what’s all the hating for*
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I was too mean huh