Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence
Write a poem of about thirty lines that consists of a single sentence. Experiment with clauses and phrases and parallel structure. Try to keep the sentence moving forward, enjambing it across lines in different ways, while making sure it is grammatically correct. This type of exercise will help you develop flexibility as a writer, teaching you new ways to phrase things and new ways to play with the syntax of a line.
As always feel free to post your work in Poetic Scriptures if you'd like some feedback, with the required two links of course.
Have fun and be creative.
Re: Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence
I have a grave addiction, diagnosed and all
so get your own damn ideas from now on.
Re: Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence
Life is nothing but scattered souls
searching for a purpose
and I've yet to find mine
feeling trapped in this meaningless existence
like im still sleeping and my nightmare
is someone else's dream
...I feel so handicap so manipulated like puppets
on a stage only here for someone else amusement
like celestial swords waging warfare within my soul
I'm trying to break free
a sheep that strayed from the herd
never to be found again as I
go down a path few dare to trend so now they
say I am an outcast...who gives a fuck
I don't want their false love anywhere near me
swallowing me up like a blackhole with it's anti-gravity
grasp that won't loosen so
I...can't...breathe...
a aging fragment of a lost time
a souvenir of a road less traveled by
a dying heartbeat of a breed now extinct I will become
memories of a tragedy embraces my mind
with cold hands
enough to make anyone tremble
but I won't no I can't
for I must continue forward with
my unquenchable thirst for peace
within me as a reminder to others I will
plague them like scars...
like a weeping widow I walk alone in my sorrow.
Re: Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence
^ way to use multiple phrases and the diction I was using. Fucking retard.
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Yooo dude, I just wrote anything that came to my mind, if I did take anything you say was your "phrases" or "diction" know it wasn't intentional. Now you calling me a fucking retard was uncall for, you could have just asked in a mature fashion. If you want I can rewrite it so you can feel better you know don't like anyone being sad or how about I delete it all together so you can be the only one with such original brilliance again, how that sounds?
Re: Challenge 7:: Run-on sentence
Quote:
different reasons why everyone becomes a fragment
like a secret beneath dust and souvenirs
slowly aging yellow.
Quote:
a aging fragment of a lost time
a souvenir
i think this is what he's talking about
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fuck it, I didn't really sweat it. It was just weird that he used some of the same language I did within a few lines like I did.
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Ooooo lolol wow I see what you mean, I really didn't do that intentionally at all my bad, pure concidence I assure you believe it or not. Still if you want I can rewrite that section.